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Link: Rea's Revenge

Summary:
A new girl comes to Hogwarts. (Not ur muffy sue) She is Harry's sister. but she was raised up by********. The real reason why voldermort came to Potter's house. Her connections w/ remus.

Princess Joy: Before I read this, I thought I had read all the really bad fics in the fandom... was I ever wrong. This story just was bad. I wanted to hurt myself (or someone else) after I'd finished reading it. And a lot of it didn't make any sense whatsoever.

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Chapter 1: the start of a new year

Princess Victoria: The story starts off with some sort of diary, monolgue. But, instead of knowing who is speaking, or even what they are talking about, we get this confusing, unformatted mess...

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I am on my way to Hogwarts. I need deatheaters.not exactly. My father was dealing with deatheaters, and I am dealing with their children. My father said I could make Harry Potter's life horrible for what they did to me. My father had to pay the price! He said I couldn't kill him too, the Professors would find out. I have no Idea how I will keep my evil side to myself. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ************************************************************************ My last year. I vow that this will be the year the Harry potter's life will be ruined. He ruined the dark lord's plans too many times. I will also get my dream girl. ************************************************************************

Princess Victoria: I think someone bad is "speaking". I like how after spending all this time about repressing evil, and ruining Harry's life, the speaker adds: I will also get my dream girl. It's like going "I am going to a sacrifice kitten. And on the plus side, I finished my needlepoint!" *throws arms up in air* I also think she should have her keyboard checked. It appears that the astrik key is sticking.

We have a new student, she is Harry Potter's sister

Princess Joy: Wow, definately didn't see that over-used idea coming.

She will also be in Gryffindor, due to her brother

Princess Joy: But of course, where else would she go?

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Chapter 2: More about Rea

Princess Victoria: This chapter starts off with a long Author's Note. I love netspeak...not. Here's the note:

Guyz, this is my first time writing a fanfic. Especially on this site. Some info 4 u, the things in the ***is Malfoy's pov. The things in the ~~` is rea's I will not write so much at the beginning now. Please review I need fans. If u think that whatever I'm putting is yours, it probably is. I read stories and the put them all into one story. I own nobody except 4 rea she is all mine. U hav to read this ch cuz all the exciting stuff happens in the next 1. hint she not what she seems. Oh yea wat does a/n stand 4???? ^^^<>)(^^^<>)(^^^<>)(^^^<>)(^^^<>)(^^^<>)(^^^<>)(^^^<>)(^^^<>)(this is my mark!!!

Now, Here's the same note, minus the netspeak and typos.

This is my first time writing a fanfic, especially on fanfiction.net. I'm just going to give you some information to help you understand. The astricks (*) represents Malfoy's Point of View. These squiggles (~) represents Rea's. These Points of View will not be used as much at the moment, but will become longer as the story progresses. I appriciate every fan I have, so please review!. If you think that I plagerized you, I probably have. I read stories and the put them all into one story, so please leave a review if that bothers you. The only character I own is Rea. This chapter is very important, and will effect the rest of the story. There is more to Rea that what appears. Also, could anyone tell me what A/N stands for? When I want to add something to the story, I will use the following: (^^^<>)

"How old are you?" Ron blurted without meaning to, "You look too young to be 17"

Princess Joy: Why does it matter how old she is? She's going to end up in Harry's House and Harry's year anyways.

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Chapter 3: and more about Rea

I officially stink at writing

Princess Joy: At least she's honest.

Princess Victoria: So, After some child (Rea) uses an Unforgivable on Draco, her and Draco get to chatting. She then proclaims that her father IS VOLDEMORT. *duh duh duh* So, now I am super confused because then she couldn't have been Harry's sister, and Dumbledore, the greatest wizard ever would have probably figured that out. This really makes no sense. And why does she have a dark mark? And why is Draco ok with her?

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Chapter 4: Werewolves

Princess Joy: We really didn't need to know her daily schedule. Really.

In a flash Rea's eyes were full of tears and she was sobbing. How she did it, I , the author don't even know. It made Draco look so guilty.

Princess Victoria: Um, You ARE the author, you SHOULD know why YOUR OC can do that...

Princess Joy: Okay, 1) Guys can't get up to the Girl's Dormitories, and 2) I don't think Harry would just dump his sister on Hermione like that, especially after just finding out about her.

Out of the dark stepped a brown haired man.

*Professor Lupin???*

Rea ran up to hug him. "I miss you Remus!" she cried, squeezing him tight. "Me too" he answered. "Where is Sirus? Is he coming?" "You know he's always late!" "Right."

Princess Victoria: WTF?! REMUS? REMUS LUPIN? REMUS J. LUPIN? No! No, no, no, NO!!! Are they evil? What? Jeez, this girl gets around.

But then again, I can't risk it, gotta tell potter

Princess Joy: How very Malfoy of him to do that.

Remus changed into a wolf with a pop

Princess Joy: Since when was transforming into a werewolf so easy?

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Chapter 5: Death

Princess Victoria: With a title like that, my hopes are up for everyone's favorite OC...

And in the Author's Note, my prayers are answered:
...um..rea dies

YES!!

do u think that rea's a mary sue?

Princess Joy: *cough* No...

The little girl, with the reddish brown curls, was happy

Princess Joy: If you read the rest of the story, you know she's lying here.

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