gelderstien (![[info]](http://l-stat.livejournal.com/img/userinfo.gif){kind=small} gelderstien) wrote,@ 2005-08-29 14:45:00 |
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WARNING! Illiteracy ahead!
Evans and Black
Summary:Sirus and Lily hate each other. when they secrelty fall in love.
This story is not yet completed.
Princess Joy: I'm sorry, but how exactly does that happen in reality? You can't hate each other and be in love. It's one or the other people!
We give this a:
**Regrettably, this story has since been taken offline. However, our review has quite of a bit of the story quoted, so please continue reading and enjoy!**
Chapter One: Gryffindor vs. Hufflepuff
Princess Victoria: Qudditch - the popular variation of Quidditch
“How are you this morning Lily and Natalie” said James sarcastically
. “Just fine you” “Great I don’t have any potions today” said Sirus.
Princess Victoria: Hahaha! Ramdom period.
Dumbledore made a speech, ‘every one may I have your attention please, because of business through the school the qudditch has been moved to this Saturday. “Said Dumbledore in his usual quite voice, instantly there was chatter around the room about there was no practice or what about the banners and who is going to play. - as to not interfere with Quidditch,
" “Because of this later information you may all have the night off home work. For I know how much qudditch means to you all.”"
Princess Joy: Let's not learn!
Princess Joy: Haha, Qudditch!
That night every one was celebrating that they won (except the prefects).
Princess Victoria: Well, duh! Prefects are losers and robots who don't have fun.
Well I think she is a pane in the ass.”
Princess Joy: Like that window?
Total Number of Spelling and Grammar Mistakes: 17
Total Number of Times They Talk About Qudditch: 6
Total Number of Times I Felt My Brain Explode While Reading This Story: 15
Chapter Two: Danger Under Water
"The present that Natalie got her was an invisibility cloak!"
Princess Joy: Okkkaayy, does everyone have one now?
"Lily swam down to the cave, but before she could reach it the merpeople looked at her and started to play with her. They took her to their home and did her hair. They played with her and put jewelry all over her like she was their doll. After they made Lily look like a model, told them she had to go and swam off."
Princess Victoria: But...but! The merepeople are UGLY! So why would they make her pretty, wouldn't they make her pretty by their standards, which is hideous?
As soon as Lily had finished explaining what happened, James dived in the water and looked around for Natalie.
There she was struggling to get out of the squid. Sirus grabbed her hand and pulled her out of the giant squids reach. When Natalie and Sirus came up out of the water there was a hand there for each person to grab on to.
Princess Joy: But, what happened to James? *sniffle*
"The candles weren’t lit. So Sirus tried lighting them with his wand. But instead of lighting the candles he put the cake on FIRE!"
Princess Victoria: No way!!! FIRE!!!!! *ph34r*
"Natalie came up running after her. “Are u ok” "
Princess Joy: GAH! Netspeak!!
"I just want to say sorry for ruing the cake"
Princess Victoria: Yeah, you better be, I hate it when people ruing my things.
Fie!
"So tell me what u think of this story and I will be grate full."
Princess Joy: Hahaha!!
Total Number of Spelling and Grammar Mistakes: 41
Total Number of Times They Talk About Qudditch: 7
Total Number of Times I Felt My Brain Explode While Reading This Story: 35
Chapter Three: Detention With Snape
"Lily took a piece of buttered toast and looked at her timetable. Her first class was transfiguration."
Princess Joy: Dude, it's April, you should know your classes by now.
Lily loved potions, it was her favorite class .She finally find it, it was on Wednesdays. Lily sighed.
Princess Victoria: *dies from teh funny*
"It was an envelope with purple in spelling out her name on it."
Princess Joy: Ink? Is that the missing word?
"You are like my light when it rains. You brighten up my day when I am said."
Princess Victoria: When I am said, my friends help me out.
"You’re a green lily in a lake of dead lilies."
Princess Joy: NICE! That's so romantic!
"I mean who would like someone as ugly as me?"
Princess Joy: Awww, muffin!
When she soar what was inside the box she gasped.
Princess Joy: Wha??
"‘So’ said James trying to make a conversation, watching Sirus star at Lily. ‘What is up with you what the 411 what’s the hot jams? ”, said James trying making Sirus laugh, but it didn’t seem to work.
"
Princess Victoria: *dies more*
"After dinner Lily went to the common room, got changed and hoped in to bed.
Princess Victoria: She must be really good at Apparation... even though she's not old enough.
"You 2 detentions" said Professor Agruny in a very cross mad angry voice.
Princess Joy: You only need to pick one.
Total Number of Spelling and Grammar Mistakes: 69
Total Number of Times They Talk About Qudditch: 7
Total Number of Times I Felt My Brain Explode While Reading This Story: 60
Chapter Four: The Perfect Dress
‘How do you like that one dear?’ Madam Archon asked her.
‘Well yes I do like it’
‘So you’ll bye it?’ Madam Archon asked Lily
‘No’
‘I thought you like it’
Princess Victoria: So the salesperson is trying to guilt her. Nice.
It was silk and a light blue with a matching shall.
Princess Victoria: What's a shall?
That night Lily thought about the ball and who she should have gone with.
Princess Joy: But she hasn't gone yet!
Total Number of Spelling and Grammar Mistakes: 88
Total Number of Times They Talk About Qudditch: 7
Total Number of Times I Felt My Brain Explode While Reading This Story: 76
Evans and Black
Summary:Sirus and Lily hate each other. when they secrelty fall in love.
This story is not yet completed.
Princess Joy: I'm sorry, but how exactly does that happen in reality? You can't hate each other and be in love. It's one or the other people!
We give this a:
**Regrettably, this story has since been taken offline. However, our review has quite of a bit of the story quoted, so please continue reading and enjoy!**
Chapter One: Gryffindor vs. Hufflepuff
Princess Victoria: Qudditch - the popular variation of Quidditch
“How are you this morning Lily and Natalie” said James sarcastically
. “Just fine you” “Great I don’t have any potions today” said Sirus.
Princess Victoria: Hahaha! Ramdom period.
Dumbledore made a speech, ‘every one may I have your attention please, because of business through the school the qudditch has been moved to this Saturday. “Said Dumbledore in his usual quite voice, instantly there was chatter around the room about there was no practice or what about the banners and who is going to play. - as to not interfere with Quidditch,
" “Because of this later information you may all have the night off home work. For I know how much qudditch means to you all.”"
Princess Joy: Let's not learn!
Princess Joy: Haha, Qudditch!
That night every one was celebrating that they won (except the prefects).
Princess Victoria: Well, duh! Prefects are losers and robots who don't have fun.
Well I think she is a pane in the ass.”
Princess Joy: Like that window?
Total Number of Spelling and Grammar Mistakes: 17
Total Number of Times They Talk About Qudditch: 6
Total Number of Times I Felt My Brain Explode While Reading This Story: 15
Chapter Two: Danger Under Water
"The present that Natalie got her was an invisibility cloak!"
Princess Joy: Okkkaayy, does everyone have one now?
"Lily swam down to the cave, but before she could reach it the merpeople looked at her and started to play with her. They took her to their home and did her hair. They played with her and put jewelry all over her like she was their doll. After they made Lily look like a model, told them she had to go and swam off."
Princess Victoria: But...but! The merepeople are UGLY! So why would they make her pretty, wouldn't they make her pretty by their standards, which is hideous?
As soon as Lily had finished explaining what happened, James dived in the water and looked around for Natalie.
There she was struggling to get out of the squid. Sirus grabbed her hand and pulled her out of the giant squids reach. When Natalie and Sirus came up out of the water there was a hand there for each person to grab on to.
Princess Joy: But, what happened to James? *sniffle*
"The candles weren’t lit. So Sirus tried lighting them with his wand. But instead of lighting the candles he put the cake on FIRE!"
Princess Victoria: No way!!! FIRE!!!!! *ph34r*
"Natalie came up running after her. “Are u ok” "
Princess Joy: GAH! Netspeak!!
"I just want to say sorry for ruing the cake"
Princess Victoria: Yeah, you better be, I hate it when people ruing my things.
Fie!
"So tell me what u think of this story and I will be grate full."
Princess Joy: Hahaha!!
Total Number of Spelling and Grammar Mistakes: 41
Total Number of Times They Talk About Qudditch: 7
Total Number of Times I Felt My Brain Explode While Reading This Story: 35
Chapter Three: Detention With Snape
"Lily took a piece of buttered toast and looked at her timetable. Her first class was transfiguration."
Princess Joy: Dude, it's April, you should know your classes by now.
Lily loved potions, it was her favorite class .She finally find it, it was on Wednesdays. Lily sighed.
Princess Victoria: *dies from teh funny*
"It was an envelope with purple in spelling out her name on it."
Princess Joy: Ink? Is that the missing word?
"You are like my light when it rains. You brighten up my day when I am said."
Princess Victoria: When I am said, my friends help me out.
"You’re a green lily in a lake of dead lilies."
Princess Joy: NICE! That's so romantic!
"I mean who would like someone as ugly as me?"
Princess Joy: Awww, muffin!
When she soar what was inside the box she gasped.
Princess Joy: Wha??
"‘So’ said James trying to make a conversation, watching Sirus star at Lily. ‘What is up with you what the 411 what’s the hot jams? ”, said James trying making Sirus laugh, but it didn’t seem to work.
"
Princess Victoria: *dies more*
"After dinner Lily went to the common room, got changed and hoped in to bed.
Princess Victoria: She must be really good at Apparation... even though she's not old enough.
"You 2 detentions" said Professor Agruny in a very cross mad angry voice.
Princess Joy: You only need to pick one.
Total Number of Spelling and Grammar Mistakes: 69
Total Number of Times They Talk About Qudditch: 7
Total Number of Times I Felt My Brain Explode While Reading This Story: 60
Chapter Four: The Perfect Dress
‘How do you like that one dear?’ Madam Archon asked her.
‘Well yes I do like it’
‘So you’ll bye it?’ Madam Archon asked Lily
‘No’
‘I thought you like it’
Princess Victoria: So the salesperson is trying to guilt her. Nice.
It was silk and a light blue with a matching shall.
Princess Victoria: What's a shall?
That night Lily thought about the ball and who she should have gone with.
Princess Joy: But she hasn't gone yet!
Total Number of Spelling and Grammar Mistakes: 88
Total Number of Times They Talk About Qudditch: 7
Total Number of Times I Felt My Brain Explode While Reading This Story: 76
